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Post by Floyd Looney on Jun 18, 2010 1:29:08 GMT -5
I wonder, is where the action starts? lol. I dunno, I write without a plan.
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Post by Attero Dominatus on Jun 18, 2010 3:29:33 GMT -5
Robber barons maybe? They come in thinking the town is easy, but the colonists put up a fight and pin them down and then the refugees finish them off with their plasma pulse rifles and hovercraft.
This could set up a tense situation because their spacecraft may have only a finite manufacturing capability, or the autofac unit needs an input of special materials that are rare or not found outside of Earth and maybe these barons know it, having used technology from crashed ships.
A simple water wheel generator or wind turbine or solar unit could recharge their plasma guns (since all they would need is electricity to run a laser which can turn the atmosphere between the gun and target into a lightning-like shaft of plasma) if the ship's own reactor could not.
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jun 18, 2010 13:52:59 GMT -5
I think the way the lamps and terminals in the houses work is a sort of wireless electricity but the reception device uses some locally produced crystal or something. Electricity use would be very limited this way.
I am not sure if there will be a pitched battle or maybe it happens on the fringes as 12-year old Brad Black tells his story. It'll write itself as I go. That is how it happens with me.
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jun 18, 2010 17:09:09 GMT -5
Okay. The fifth chapter has been added. Attachments:
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Post by Attero Dominatus on Jun 19, 2010 15:15:14 GMT -5
That was very good.
Fighting against a technologically advanced enemy is very difficult but it can be done. Wait until they have a false sense of security and take their armor off. Or shoot the power generators for the plasma guns.
Pretending to be a collaborator to get intel is an option too.
And then there is also the option of poisoning food, water, medical supplies. Bacteria and viruses native to the planet would be the best weapon because the newcomers would not be as immunized as the original colonists.
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jun 19, 2010 15:42:54 GMT -5
Yes. I think there will be an occupation period. The thing is the bad guys have other ships on the way and they might just colonize the rest of the planet with or without them anyway.
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Post by Attero Dominatus on Jun 19, 2010 18:27:49 GMT -5
Global occupation would be a great way to show that not only is technology dependent on a large population and industrial base, it can be a weakness as well. That goes double for networked computers; the wireless could be used for hacking as much as covert communications (There are ways of hiding secret messages in things like news bulletins. Spatial referencing like the Bible Code is one way).
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jun 19, 2010 18:32:24 GMT -5
I might be able to stretch this thing out. I've rewritten a couple of sentences in previous chapters today. I'll probably find more things to correct when I reread it again.
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jun 24, 2010 1:46:31 GMT -5
Chapter 5 is now expanded. That last page just came to me pretty quick. Attachments:
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Post by Attero Dominatus on Jun 26, 2010 3:14:03 GMT -5
It was good. I am curious what the occupier's Causus Belli will be. I suggest it should be something to preserve the loyalty to the occupier's own troops and whatever people the bring with them, because they would need a good story to prevent any more 'Samanthas' (a term they could use for defectors to the colonist cause).
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jun 26, 2010 11:30:52 GMT -5
I'll have to think of something. heh.
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