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Post by Attero Dominatus on Jun 5, 2009 18:49:50 GMT -5
I like the way you write him as utterly clueless about self determination. I hope he defects.
A communist officer in my novel surrenders to Miya after being subdued by one of her attacks, originally because he was being abandoned and sacrificed by his own superiors and their own collectivist thinking, but he will stupidly believe in marxism until he learns about its futility only in death.
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jun 5, 2009 18:55:22 GMT -5
McMillan is young. He can still learn, but not by being told. He must learn it for himself. Why are these people the way they are?
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jun 5, 2009 18:58:04 GMT -5
Commodore Thed Marshall is another story, he will end up as the bad bad guy I think, I am not certain yet. The Viceroy and Governor-General will be pretty bad themselves as the clueless apparatchicks charged with bringing Lysander into the human family of worlds.
The UEA declares themselves the ruler of all humans everywhere
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Post by Attero Dominatus on Jun 5, 2009 19:22:34 GMT -5
Why are these people the way they are? Why collectivists are the way they are? Well, in my story, the explanation given is that they see anything with self interest and just about every natural human trait, even differences between people, as a fundamental flaw that must be stamped out by any means necessary. They believe that everyone must be made the same in every single possible way for there to be peace and prosperity.
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jun 6, 2009 10:52:12 GMT -5
I only added 2 paragraphs last night, I guess I need to FReep less and C Cave less.
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jun 6, 2009 13:04:49 GMT -5
I just added a page. The Commodore was having a nice meal of celebration with the new Viceroy and Governor-General. He asked what they intended to do, and of course they intended no compromises with the locals in the "normalization" of Lysander.
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Post by Attero Dominatus on Jun 7, 2009 0:34:50 GMT -5
Cool. I have enjoyed what I have seen of the novel and hope you get it finished.
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jun 9, 2009 2:16:20 GMT -5
I am not sure where its going to go but I am pretty sure Commodore Thed Marshall and the soldier Josh McMillan will clash.
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Post by Attero Dominatus on Jun 9, 2009 19:48:41 GMT -5
Cool. Of all the stories you posted on this forum, this one is my favorite. I hope you finish this one.
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jun 19, 2009 19:29:42 GMT -5
I found myself going back to narrating rather than writing the story out. *sigh*
Lysander
There were troops on the streets of the town, here and there military vehicles were located or moving around. The checkpoints and observers were reporting no problems and things had been quiet for days.
The UEA-controlled media reported only what they wanted people to know or to think they know. Whether anything was true or not was up for debate and none of the locals gave official media much credibility.
They met for coffee or lunch at an outdoor cafe, right under the noses of the oppressors, in two's and three's, larger meetings being outlawed by the Viceroy. Garbage collection was now intermitten, work slow downs were less noticeable in other places- for now. The underground dissident movement had grown very quickly and now had quite a spider-webbed network all over the colony.
The Viceroy and the Governor-General had been televised discussing the formation of a local council that would implement UEA laws and edicts. This council would have no powers and would not be elected, simply appointed by the Viceroy himself. It was to be a rubber-stamp for the UEA that would give them the propaganda of 'representation'.
Without warning the green lawn of Government Place filled up with demonstrators, carrying signs, screaming curses at the foreign troops and their masters. The soldiers guarding the building had been caught unawares, they were suddenly undermanned and one of them panicked.
The panicked blast struck three protesters, blood splattered from at least one of them onto the others. The angry crowd rushed the soldiers and began beating them with their fists and whatever was handy. The soldiers were unarmored, wearing the heavy armor had been discontinued after a week of patrolling quiet streets.
Dead and injured soldiers laid among the demonstrators when other troops arrived and the mob dispersed. Aerial vehicles had taken pictures of some of them, their faces would be posted in public with rewards offered. If the rewards were not claimed, then collective punishment would follow.
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Post by Attero Dominatus on Jun 20, 2009 17:49:42 GMT -5
Very good. Will there be any Quisling type character who sells out his own people for the UEA and then gets the firing squad in the end? Or collaborators?
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jun 20, 2009 19:48:23 GMT -5
YUP. BTW- I wrote that before the events today in Iran.
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Post by Floyd Looney on Feb 14, 2010 3:32:16 GMT -5
I should really get back to adding to some of these old stories. I have a peer review to do though.
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