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Post by Attero Dominatus on Jun 22, 2010 20:53:16 GMT -5
That would be a neat idea.
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jun 23, 2010 12:23:45 GMT -5
Thanks, I guess I'll be rearranging it after I finish or something.
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Post by Attero Dominatus on Jun 23, 2010 16:57:41 GMT -5
I look forward to seeing more.
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jun 23, 2010 17:12:32 GMT -5
I'll try to get around to it
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jul 1, 2010 0:52:58 GMT -5
doing some online research on the Roman Empire. Not that its a copy of the real Roman empire or anything.
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Post by Attero Dominatus on Jul 1, 2010 3:55:09 GMT -5
I look forward to seeing the next chapter. This has become my favorite story of yours.
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jul 1, 2010 12:50:58 GMT -5
I only remembered the outline of the original I wrote a long time ago, I don't think I did a background on the "bad guy" back then. I might not even keep them in this order truthfully.
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jul 1, 2010 14:33:38 GMT -5
tappity tap tap tap
I'm writing, I'm writing
No pushing.
The ad I see above is for a browser game called "Holy War". Oh geez.
holy-war.net
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jul 1, 2010 17:33:24 GMT -5
It will be more Greyson backgrounder. He's going to be turn bad soon, heh.
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Post by Attero Dominatus on Jul 1, 2010 17:46:05 GMT -5
cool
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jul 1, 2010 21:05:08 GMT -5
This last part actually runs pretty long. I guess it will be a dual storyline after I divide it up later. So long that I decided to just make it a PDF file. The last part starts on page 19 where it says 8 years laterThen it runs about 8 more pages. heh. Attachments:
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jul 1, 2010 21:50:57 GMT -5
Fixed some spelling errors. Attachments:
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jul 1, 2010 21:51:44 GMT -5
I really started feeling sorry for this Greyson guy, heh.
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Post by Attero Dominatus on Jul 2, 2010 6:37:45 GMT -5
So did I. To have one's own wife and son become his fathers, all because some corrupt politicians abused the law to their own ends.
I also the additional details, especially the information that the clone women are essential for their population, as well as the the hypocrisy and corruption of the planetary league (reminds me of the UN!)
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jul 2, 2010 12:33:44 GMT -5
The hypocrisy runs deep. But there is a point, if the manufactured women can't be trusted as true humans then why are their sons treated as real humans on Roma? The other planets treat them all the same way they treat their women. Anyways over the decades Roma has become an outcast among worlds but its hardly the only one and hardly the worst.
Greyson will soon fall in with space pirates and human smuggling and all that. Out of desperation more than anything at first.
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