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Post by Attero Dominatus on Jul 10, 2010 18:38:24 GMT -5
I liked the description about how Rochina was kept poor by the Planetary League, and I liked the cliffhanger that was the meeting between the Black Wind and Plucky Duck. Black Wind is a great name by the way. This Greyson character is turning out really good.
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jul 10, 2010 19:57:30 GMT -5
So what if someone woke up in an apartment and had total amnesia? How would we try to make them think they had a past? I bet someone could do a pretty good job, at least on the surface if they were wealthy enough. So here is a little narrative. Of course I get my present and past tenses messed up, which I do often, and its just a sketch really. I sure do a lot of those. Attachments:
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jul 10, 2010 19:59:47 GMT -5
Remember that Greyson will know Sarah, has tried to capture her. Maybe actually fell for her a little. So when he meets Tara, its a bit of deja vu for him.
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jul 14, 2010 15:31:20 GMT -5
Another update. Introducing...... Sara! Attachments:
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jul 14, 2010 22:17:33 GMT -5
Okay here is the story that makes up most of the backstory for Tara. Kind of. In a way. Attachments:
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Post by Attero Dominatus on Jul 15, 2010 18:04:47 GMT -5
I am reading now.
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Post by Attero Dominatus on Jul 15, 2010 19:15:42 GMT -5
I really like Sara. You wrote the initial attraction between Sara and Greyson well too, and I liked how the advanced missile launcher had trouble working after decades of neglect (complex weapons work perfectly in most post-apocalyptic films and movies).
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Post by Attero Dominatus on Jul 15, 2010 19:15:48 GMT -5
I am reading this other file now.
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jul 15, 2010 19:18:24 GMT -5
It's sort of incomplete but it always is for me, lol
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jul 16, 2010 17:55:45 GMT -5
hello?
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Post by Attero Dominatus on Jul 19, 2010 15:55:30 GMT -5
I am sorry that I was gone for the past few days. I will resume where I left off on First And Secong.
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jul 19, 2010 17:10:47 GMT -5
cool
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Post by Attero Dominatus on Jul 19, 2010 18:12:04 GMT -5
Johnathan's memories are pretty sad indeed! Except for the happy parts. Nice job on the emotions there, and the cloning history. Still reading it.
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Post by Attero Dominatus on Jul 19, 2010 18:14:59 GMT -5
Or at least Cara's memories of this Johnathan are. Still, great job. Still reading.
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Post by Floyd Looney on Jul 19, 2010 18:50:49 GMT -5
Jonathons' memories tranplanted into Cara
Trans-Corporeal Transplant?
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