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Post by Floyd Looney on Sept 1, 2009 2:52:45 GMT -5
I think it was supposed to be the beginning of a political-intrigue/murder mystery type story set in the late 1800's in a fictionalized USA or something. Maybe a strange hybrid? Its a Word docx file. attached. Barely more than 2 pages. Any thoughts? Attachments:
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Post by Floyd Looney on Sept 1, 2009 20:41:56 GMT -5
Okay, anyway I think has possibilities but needs a rewrite. I kinda like the line: Good boy, I hate him.
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Post by Attero Dominatus on Sept 1, 2009 22:21:48 GMT -5
I liked that line too. I think you should have the villains try to shut down the Sturm Morning Storm and other liberty supporting newspapers by way of things like regulation or buying out the properties where they are located or something else. Show just how bad the statist politicians are.
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Post by Floyd Looney on Sept 1, 2009 22:58:52 GMT -5
There has to be conflict somewhere along the line. You know that in old west it was not totally unusual for angry crowds to target opposition papers and destroy their presses and stuff.
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Post by cambrian on Sept 5, 2009 1:16:24 GMT -5
And it was not unusual for rival businesses to carry on feuds and wars and assorted skullduggery to get an edge on each other. Double if one happened to have friendly links in government.
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Post by Floyd Looney on Sept 5, 2009 1:42:41 GMT -5
Sometimes a crooked cabal could come to power. The mayor, town prosecutor and judge might all be in cahoots. The hired police force might be their henchmen. This still happens of course, anyone see that story from Jericho Arkansas?
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